Tuesday, December 22, 2015

I FLOAT UNIVERSES


I float universes
To birth inside you
Yet you gap a void
To empty the rush
Dream often comes
Wide awake
Yet you flake my eyes
With drops of icicles
I hold my steps
Lest I worry you not
Yet mire are my act
To see your cry
.........................
Excellent review ...!
I prostate!!
"This is actually a potentially really excellent poem, and I understand it...imperfect language use to a certain extent, however, affords the mist through which this excellent poem cannot be seen clearly for what it is.
Great title.
Those first two lines are amazing..."I float universes / to birth inside you"....so beautiful."

No comments: